1.In the late 9th century, Hungary was found by Arpad.
2.The Kingdom of Hungary lasted for 946 years.
3.The Battle of Mohac resulted in Ottoman occupation.
4.In 1241. the Mongolian Tartars invaded and destroyed Hungary.
5.After the Mongols retreated, King Bela ordered to build a castle to defend against Mongol invasion.
6.In 1944, the Nazis occupied Hungary.
7.In 1945, the Soviet Union liberated then occupied Hungary.
8.In 1956, Hungary had a revolution.
9.In 1999, Hungary joined NATO.
10.In 2004, Hungary became an E.U. member.
1.In the late 9th century, beautiful Hungary was accidently found by smart Arpad.
2.The powerful kingdom of Hungary strongly lasted for 946 years.
3.The The terrible Battle of Mohacs badly resulted in tragedy Ottoman occupation
4.In 1241, the cruel Mongolian Tartars forcefuly invaded and totally destroyed grievd Hungary.
5.After the fierce Mongols retreated quickly, clever King Bela suddenly ordered to build the huge castle to defend against unexpcted Mongol invasion.
6.In 1944, the crazy Nazis surprisingly occupied weak Hungary.
7.In 1945, the enormous Soviet Union terribly liberated then outrageously occupied frightened Hungary.
8.In 1956, angry Hungarian people dramatically started a big revolution.
9.In 1999, outstanding Hungary proudly joined famous NATO.
10.In 2004, lucky Hungary gracefully became a great EU member.
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EunJung,
ReplyDeleteI forgot to look over your profile so here are a few notes that I took; it looks like you struggle with prepositions after verbs, so you might want to pay extra attention to this area:
"About Me"
. traveling around ____ world
. punctuation after world
. especially ____ European
. look ___ your blogs
. to learn ____ many
"The History of Hungary"
1. ___ ___ late 9th (add words)
3. The battle (what battle? you haven't mentioned a battle yet, so you can't use the definite article "the". Just say "Battles resulted in..." or say the specific name of the battle
4. In 1241.
5. build the castle (what castle? you haven't mentioned a castle yet, so you can't use the definite article "the")
8. revoiutoin (spelling)
10. became ___ E.U. member
Please make the same changes in the section below that contains the adverbs and adjectives. Your use of adverbs and adjectives in this section is superb. Great work!
3. maybe here you want to say "The terrible Battle of Mohacs"
3. in tragedy ____ Ottoman occupation (preposition)
4. grieved needs to be in another form
5. defend against for unexpected (omit a word)